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     Musicfan Celebrity Bewarse Username: Musicfan Post Number: 41498 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: |
 kabootar, you came long way, great job, excellent!!. Venkanna asessulu nee meeda tappakunda untayi.. venkanna meeda kavitvam rayatame great inka migita vanni light annattu...padaala vaduka, stanzas are well written. two words konni adiripoyayi.. inka review vishayanikoste, edo okati vimarsista, improvements chepta.. basic gaa oka kavitvam ki theme undaali, like pogadatamo, edaina koratamo, prasansinchatamo, leka korikalu koratamo.. ikkada nee poetry lo there are some diveresions in the flow, Inkotenti ante, oka chota, nuvvu, memu, mammalni andaru ante kudaradu. oka poem should address one of these, it shouldnt mix everyone. ( veyare, teestam, sakshatkarinchu ) inka bhaktagresara ane padam, ikkada artham emiti? bhakta gressara ante bhaktulalo pradhamudaa ani, ( first devotee ) inka last lo andari gurinchi cheptunnappudu, lakshmi and alivelu mangamma reference flow lo kudaraledu,, you could have ended on a different note.. already munde cheppinattu, ivanni guddu meeda eekalu peekatam. Write more on similar lines, it gives you immense satisfaction and happiness that many things cannot give you.. All the best.. Review - Yeto vellipoyindi |
